英语作文[10/100marks]

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要求：请给你的笔友写一封e-mail，介绍你自己的爱好及家庭状况。你的署名为Wang Liqiang。笔友叫Jerry。

Dear Jerry:
Thanks for your e-mail.Here is my e-mail.
I have many hobbies:read books,paint picture,play volleyball,play basketball,skate,etc.I like playing basketball very much.My friend Bob with I is a great combination in our school,I think.Well,I have a medium family.My grandpa,grandma and my parents.We love each other.
What about you?Please write to me soon.

Yours,
Wang Liqiang

将写错的地方找出来，谢啦！不要chinglish，要English！！
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这个作文得了7分#￥%

Here is my e-mail.可有可无，但最好是Here is my letter.

I have many hobbies:read books,paint picture,play volleyball,play basketball,skate,etc.
老大，hobby后面是用现在进行时，应该是I have many hobbies:reading books,painting picture,playing volleyball,playing basketball,skating and so on.

My friend Bob with I is a great combination in our school改成
My friend Bob and I are great partnors in our school

My grandpa,grandma and my parents.你不觉得少点什么了吗？

chinese

改成This is my e-mail 但似乎没什么必要这句话

etc.最好改成and so on

My friend Bob with I is a great combination in our school改成
My friend Bob and I are great partnors in our school

medium 改成 ordinary

Please write to me soon按习惯是 look forward to hearing you

英语作文最好分一分段,不然改卷老师看起来会不舒服,分数自然不高
连接词过少,文章缺少好的连接词和佳句,文章看起来就会很死板没生意.佳句的话我建议你多做一些阅读理解,因为很多佳句都在里面,仔细阅读,在文章没问题的时候如果有看不懂的和拗口的句子,尽早去问老师,因为这种句子往往是佳句.

我以前也和你一样,后来就开始摘句,后来考试时大多都用上了,比若说Love means to give,not to